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April 14th, 2008

Chapter 1 - Page 23

Meanwhile, in a similar hallway not too far away..

8 Responses to “Chapter 1 - Page 23”

  1. Someguy Says:

    Are transparent speech bubbles suppose to be thoughts?

  2. Riess Says:

    They’re whispers.

  3. SquidDNA Says:

    Which are basically spoken thoughts. Actual thought bubbles would be sort of hokey in my opinion. I suppose this way it’s more like a play.

  4. Tory Says:

    And the plot thickens.

  5. hiro Says:

    the “oh my” expression is lol
    because of the angle of head tilt

  6. Chrome Says:

    Your archives guy looks a bit like Brent Spiner’s dude from Independence Day. Hehehe.

    Anyways, this is shaping up nicely. Is it me or is Thirteen looking a bit more predatory of late? I rather like your slight revamp of him here. Makes him more of a suspicious character, one to wonder what he’s up to as you go along in the story.

    I also like the use of the whispers instead of thought bubbles. “Like a play” strikes me as a pretty good analogy.

  7. SquidDNA Says:

    Unfortunately it also leads me to put walls of text in the script.

  8. hiro Says:

    well
    in keeping with the play allegory
    you can say that the wall of text
    was a soliloquy :p

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